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.Kiss. by ~6-Simplicity-9:icon6-Simplicity-9:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Cheap or Tawdry Romance > Fixed




I hate you each time I close my eyes;
Reality interferes with fading thoughts inside.
A smile misleads and draws me near.
I love the way you reduce me to tears.

My spirits distract and dissolve my prism
confronting beliefs and rendering their prison.
And as they keep in their dissonance,
I hold prayers and wish for your presence.

Yearning your glance hinders improvement
As I enter your aura and refuse movement
you aim a smirk and urge me away.
And the heart I gave, you continue to fray.

So bless my lips and string me along
serenade me with your suicide song.
Because with you, my smile is a sign of bluffing
but without you, my whole existance means nothing.
©2005-2009 ~6-Simplicity-9
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Author's Comments

I love you so much you can stop my breath with a kiss
Life is turmoil, take me somewhere better than this.

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~sonicspaz101 Feb 20, 2005, 10:09:32 AM
This was beautiful hun. You always write something that moves me to tears. Great job yet again.
Sam

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Les brindilles et les pierres peuvent casser nos os, mais les mots casseront nos coeurs.
(thank you franky)

oh yeah...this is the coolest club for writers, personally, on D.A. :iconburn-p0etry:
:icon6-simplicity-9:
~6-Simplicity-9 Feb 20, 2005, 10:10:36 AM
Thanks Sam

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Stock account: ~Simplicity-Stock

This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
:iconsonicspaz101:
~sonicspaz101 Feb 20, 2005, 10:13:36 AM
Sure. Something you wanna talk about?

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Les brindilles et les pierres peuvent casser nos os, mais les mots casseront nos coeurs.
(thank you franky)

oh yeah...this is the coolest club for writers, personally, on D.A. :iconburn-p0etry:
:iconjerzchick16:
~jerzchick16 Feb 20, 2005, 10:49:54 AM
aww this is abosolutely beautiful. each line is perfect sasha, just perfect! :+fav:

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if i stop myself before loving again, am i stopping myself from the greater pain as well..or only causing more of it?

member of ~Deviant-Underground, *Circleoffriends, ~invisible-inc, *The-Red-Envelope, and =PoetryPlease
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~JenniferStarling Feb 20, 2005, 10:50:34 AM
Sounds like someone in love with someone who disregards them... but I tend to miss things in your poems... I love the alliteration in "serenade me with your sweet suicide song.'

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Current novel-in-progress.
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~6-Simplicity-9 Feb 20, 2005, 11:47:21 AM
:nod: You may've missed something but your interpretation was correct. Thanks a lot.

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Stock account: ~Simplicity-Stock

This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
:icon6-simplicity-9:
~6-Simplicity-9 Feb 20, 2005, 11:47:58 AM
:kiss: You're amazing Rachel

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Stock account: ~Simplicity-Stock

This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
:iconrhymesayer:
~rhymesayer Feb 20, 2005, 11:51:10 AM
beautiful. This is one of your better poems by far. great job! :+fav: :)

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When life gives you lemons, you paint that shit gold.
:icon6-simplicity-9:
~6-Simplicity-9 Feb 20, 2005, 11:52:20 AM
Thank you so much sweetie :hug:

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Stock account: ~Simplicity-Stock

This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
:iconsilvergirl:
~silvergirl Feb 20, 2005, 9:49:30 PM
I cant say much that hasnt already been said.
The poem is well written .. not that i'd expect anything less..

your flow and word play is excellent. I refuse to say at its best because you always seem to out do your self. amazing :)





Yearning your glance hinders improvement. <- favorite line

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Sometimes blindness finds me and leads me through ignorance not allowing us to gain experience so we become lifeless At other times I cover with self pity or work aimlessly through reality so Occasionally I choose to travel alone but never fulfill my pos
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