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           I’ve seen old bits of dragon’s gold; they lie in your liar’s lair. And although your neck and hands are dressed, you are still so sadly bare. I have watched your gold turn into glass; the rust reflects my lust. And although I smile as I dance, my heart degrades to dust. I have felt that glass shred soft skin; the blood so red and thin. And although my head is held up high, I am one cast down within. I have felt the pain of a thousand dead; it just can’t leave my head. And although I face the physical, it’s more of what you said. It’ll never be the same, she claimed; I can’t be what she needs. And although I try so hard for her, she’d rather watch me bleed.
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~DeflectLOVE:iconDeflectLOVE: Mar 9, 2008, 8:45:16 AM
Ouch! Sounds like the girl is really a bitch! I hate one sided love...
Great poem! I like how it was written in paragraph form. I haven't seen it done like that before!

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~Faith-loves-Axel:iconFaith-loves-Axel: Mar 9, 2008, 9:06:07 AM
Wonderful!Your peoms make sense through to the end and no alot of people can say that now a days!I love it!

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What's wrong with this world where someone can need steel to feel?
Where death feels more right then life?
Where love falls down on deaf ears?
Where darkness becomes the only safe refuge,
Where light is just a memory.
~krackels89:iconkrackels89: Mar 9, 2008, 10:52:21 AM
I love the rhyme scheme that you have set up throughout the "poem". That was a neat little trick there.
This was very well written, the pain you have is quite evident.
This is absolutely beautiful.

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~spitfire66:iconspitfire66: Mar 9, 2008, 11:21:14 AM Mood: Love
wow!!

this is beyond awesome!!

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~6-Simplicity-9:icon6-Simplicity-9: Mar 11, 2008, 11:02:13 PM
ha, yeah. i'd hate it too. this was just a dream though, she loves me. =D thanks so much.

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This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
~6-Simplicity-9:icon6-Simplicity-9: Mar 11, 2008, 11:02:30 PM
thank you :kiss:

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This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
~6-Simplicity-9:icon6-Simplicity-9: Mar 11, 2008, 11:03:13 PM
Thank you! That's what I liked about this, also. I'm glad you felt the same.

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This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
~6-Simplicity-9:icon6-Simplicity-9: Mar 11, 2008, 11:03:25 PM
thank you :rose:

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Stock account: ~Simplicity-Stock

This shade of ordinary burns my eyes
simplicity, i despise
in simplicity i'm disguised.
~krackels89:iconkrackels89: Mar 12, 2008, 12:16:14 AM
You have a talent for portraying your thoughts eloquently, and yet you are still able to set up forms of repetition.
I am quite envious of that. :>

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